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In my 1230 English class, I received a very unique opportunity to interview one of my peers in class. I appreciate the experience because it allows people to see people around them for what they are really worth. You never really know much about the people who are sitting around you or that you might encounter everyday until you sit down and speak with them. The peer I had the chance to interview was 15 – year old Mauricio Castro, with no relation to Fidel he told me. Now the first thing that would come to mind is, “Why is there a 15 year-old student in my college English class?†but actually he is a dual enrollee, meaning he is still in high school but he is taking some early college courses. Mauricio was born in Newark, New Jersey, and is a Colombian American. He has family residing in New Jersey, but most are in Colombia. One day in his young childhood his dad, whom worked in New York, was told he had to transfer to Miami, Florida. “Where going to live in a place called Coconut Creek, Florida,†Mauricio was told by his father. Young Mauricio was not looking forward to moving to some country suburb which he was envisioning. Upon arriving, his fears had been justified. They moved to a small suburb in Coconut Creek, just off of Wiles road and Lyons road. When they got there, it was just a small apartment community with nothing in the nearby vicinity. He had to share one small bedroom with a younger brother and sister. They soon after moved to a house in Coral Springs. When it came to taking vacations, Mauricio’s father decided to take them to Niagara Falls in New York City. The trip was such a success and everyone enjoyed it so much that they begin to travel quite often. As a family they have been all over the United States to such places as New York, California, Georgia, Nevada, Utah, Canada, and even Costa Rica and Europe. Mauricio tells me his family loves to travel, even though his younger siblings don’t actually like the trip just the destination. I asked him why they travel so much, “Mostly to see relatives and friends.†He stated. His favorite place to go is New York, partly because that’s the place they have visited the most and partly because the never sleep atmosphere. He really likes to see Niagara Falls, and has vivid descriptions that make you almost feel like you just went yourself. “They give you ponchos,†he starts off “and you walk through a small area close enough to the actual falls so that you can not only see the water but also feel the misty water almost like rain coming down on you.†He describes this area more than once so I get the idea that it’s not only his favorite but he has been there more than once. Now these trips are not just a drive straight through, point A to point B type of affair. Once they leave South Florida they stop in Tampa first, then on to St. Augustine, where they have a traditional ice cream shop they must always stop at as well as the historic district, then on to Georgia. They most of the time travel as five, but every now in then his grandmother will tag along. He told me of the trips to the canyons in the west that they have been too. Although he likes the beauty of the canyons he is somewhat taken back by the fact that the canyons don’t have any fences or guard rails to keep people from falling over. . Once when he was too young to remember, his mom told him the story about his younger brother getting to close and almost falling over. Mauricio just recalls having a bad stomach ache and not being able to fully enjoy the trip. While in Costa Rica he and his dad decided to travel up to a settlement near a local volcano where they could shop for gifts for his sister and mother. On the trip they came across a local spot where there was an eatery. What made this place so special is you where able to fish in the waters to catch your own meal and they prepared and cooked it for you while you waited. Mauricio enjoyed this not only because the fish was excellent being so fresh, but because he also got to watch his father catch there food. I asked Mauricio what made these road trips so special for him that made it different from what his siblings experienced, he told me because he got to take all kinds of pictures and he also looked for amusement parks. Mauricio loves amusement parks with plenty of heart pounding rides. They higher or faster the ride goes the better he likes it. Hershey Park, Six Flags Great Adventure, Kings Dominion, Busch Gardens, is just a few to name that he has already conquered. “What are your favorite things to bring back,†I asked him but he told me he doesn’t really have favorite things besides his pictures. He does however look forward to the visits from his family in Costa Rica, because they bring him a special chocolate bar called Jet. “Jet bars are better than Hershey’s chocolate†he exclaimed with the biggest smile. They are very small and segmented kind of like the little fun size Hershey’s bar you get for Halloween or at parties, but they bring them back in small bulk loads that consist of a few months supply. When you open the Jet bars, under the wrapper you find a collectors card that have something about the county on it. Mauricio explained how he gets the chocolate but he gives the collectors cards to his father who is trying to get them all, which would be about 500 different types that tell about things ranging from small animals to flowers and trees. He then explained, “They also bring custom made gold jewelry but that’s not important compared to those Jet bars†then just laughed it off. In traveling so much and having the possibility to see so much at such an early age, Mauricio has a real grasp on what he would like to do in life and why he chose to do so. Mauricio wants to be Photographic journalist. He believes that he can create a substantial contribution to society through his work of bringing news to people especially through photographs. He believes that if taken the correct way, a picture can truly bring about a change in a persons life or at least that person can see the truth of a situation not just what someone interrupts the truth to be for them. Mauricio also wants to follow in his father footsteps at some point in his life. His father was a tank mechanic in the United States Army, and also had the opportunity to go back packing through Europe to see what remains from World War II. Mauricio shows interest in wanting to know what went on in the not so distant history before him. Who knows maybe he can just go to photograph what was left behind.
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tldnr
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i recommend you go over it again but its ok
3 :
k, well, last time i checked, Niagara falls were in upstate new york, not new york city, thats about it.
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i'd say your paper is fine. you got the details and all. The actual intro was fine. your'e ok.
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It sucks, you will get an F. OMG taht is the worst paper ever written and it deserves to be burned. Question said to criticize it, so i hope i helped
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